Yay, more suffering time! Can't wait to read about what more fun my sister will have with a dead killer!

Someone please stop me.

Kagome woke first that day and saw her loving boyfriend and wondered what had happened the night before then it hit her she had given her virginity to bankotsu

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and wasn't ashamed of her self she loved the man and he loved her.

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'wow im the luckiest girl in the world' she thought smiling to herself 'we should get up' she shook his shoulder he grunted and snuggled closer to her

Snuggles, snuggles, ALWAYS WITH THE SNUGGLES.

thoughts of the first time he did that to her came into her mind.(this happened in chapter 3)

Because it was so long ago we clearly forgot. No, wait, you anticipated me frequently purging memories from my mind in a desperate attempt to stay sane, didn't you?!

"Bankotsu" she whispered into his ear "its time to get up" he slowly woke up and smirked "well this is one way to wake up in the morning"

"Being told to wake up by someone I slept with. Totally new, except that one time with Jakotsu."

she blushed and he kissed her "morning beautiful how are you this fine morning my love?" she smiled she liked hearing this from him "fine but we need to get up." "fine" he groaned sitting up he gave her, her clothed and put his on once they were dressed the went back to their camp and saw the others still asleep.

sleeping naked outside can't be good, can it? And the roaming demons can only make it worse, I feel.

MEANWHILE, OVER AT NARAKU'S LAIR OF EVIL AND SCUMMERY

Naraku had been keeping an eye on Kagome and was so angry he didn't know what to do.

Okay, how, exactly? Ninja spies? Camera bees? hiding behind trees and tailing her?

He had everything he ever wanted his first love Kikyo (he had revived Kikyo once everyone had left)

Pro tip: Important information should not be confined to mere afterthoughts like this.

but he had gotten rather bored of her lately

I guess Naraku's smart enough to realise corpses/clay bodies aren't the best partners ever.

and so he tried to beat her and hurt her but it still didn't amuse him.

Why do I get the feeling this was included not because Naraku is evil, but because of Kikyo? Oh, I'm sorry, I meant 'Kiky-ho'.

He wanted the miko known as Kagome and couldn't get her yet he wanted to take her virginity.

Thanks, I really wanted to know that.

He wanted to torture her. He was always amused when fighting her she had spunk, a nice body, was smart, caring, and would put others before herself.

Uh, look, I know Kagome is supposed to be Kikyo's reincarnation and all, but since when was Naraku so hung up about wanting to... do that... with Kagome? Hell, he wasn't even bothering with Kikyo herself at this point!

Also, EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW

'she would be a wonderful mate and mother' he thought to him self if he had her with him now he would mate her and make him hers so nobody could take her from him Kagome Higarashi was his damn it and he will get her willingly or by force.

Congratulations, author, you actually made Naraku even worse than what he already was: An unrepentant bastard turned sexual deviant. Because I really wanted the tentacle monster dude to be one of them.

He just needed a plan and he would have her 'all I have to do is turn them against each other and she will be mine. Perfect Kagome Higarashi just you wait you will be mine by the end of the week' he chuckled to himself and got to work on his plan.

Lovely, he's going to kidnap Kagome, make the Super Bank Bros treat Kagome like shit, then snuggle with her and then they'll fall in love. Fuck.

BACK TO MY UNFORTUNATE SISTER

Kagome had learned Jakotsu was hard to get up in the morning and Bankotsu had to be rough with him

Considering the stuff that happened recently, I am taking this the wrong way and I'm still too young to resort to alcohol to fix my brain.

and Kagome being Kagome was upset about it right now they were eating their breakfast "oh come on Kagome please don't be mad"

"After all, we've known each other much longer than we've you!"

...I miss the days when I couldn't bring myself to make these jokes.

"I don't like it that you are rough on Jakotsu" "okay yes I am a little rough on him when getting up but he's the hardest person to wake up" "but still you could be more nice to him" "I can try but im new to being the good guy stuff and being nice"

So is all this really important? Is Bankotsu going to learn that punching someone's face is a bad way to wake people up and never do it again?

"whatever" "come on boo don't be mad anymore I like you happy" "did you just call me boo?"

Yeah, what's up with that?

(Sorry guys my friend calls me that he reminds me of miroku sometimes lol)

...Huh? Someone calling you 'Boo' reminds you of Miroku? I... don't understand.

"Yeah I thought it was a cute nickname for you" "hmmm" he groaned and faced Jakotsu "Jakotsu" "yes big brother?" "im sorry for being tough on you do you forgive me?" he smiled "of course big brother" "see he forgives me" she giggled and kissed his cheek "we good?" she nodded and he smiled. When everyone was done breakfast they set out and went to search for shards.

well, that was a stupid waste of time that feels like the author just wanted to say she had a nickname.

After a hour or two some bandits were walking and saw them but mostly Kagome they were interested in the one looked like a ugly rapist you would find in a dark ally

What? so... one of the bandits looks like an 'ugly rapist'...

...That's... an incredibly bad description, really, especially since I've yet to see any ugly rapists in a dark alley. do they all have that distinctive kind of ugliness to them?

and the other was actually kind of cute he had nice hair a cute face, blue eyes, black hair, he wore a green shirt and black tight pants you could see he was turned on by Kagome and Jakotsu.

Meanwhile, the supposedly 'cute' one gets something resembling an actual description. And is quite visibly turned on by my sister and the cross-dresser. My poor brain.

"well, well, well look here brother two wimps and two hotty's"

Need I remind you that the two 'hotties' are my sister and the cross-dresser, and the two 'wimps' are the guy who wields a sword bigger than most men and a pretty tall guy with clawed gauntlets. these are the most retarded bandits I've ever heard of.

'don't they know Jakotsu's a guy?' kagome thought to herself

No one knows his real gender until it's too late, remember?

"why yes brother I do

Is this supposed to respond to Kagome's thoughts? Why would he call her a brother? I don't understand!

oh look here the short one thinks he can be a warrior hahahahaha"

CAN YOU NOT FUCKING SEE BANKOTSU'S SWORD?!?!?!?!

Bankotsu was clenching his jaw and spoke "boys you ready to have some fun?" "oh yeah" Suikotsu stated sharpening his steal claws

and I was actually beginning to forget Suikotsu was even there. First time he's been name dropped in a long time.

"you bet big brother" "you're a dude?" the rapist looking one asked stunned "don't care he's still hot" "your sick brother"

As is the author, really...

"I'll take what I can get" he said simply Jakotsu had hearts in his eyes but then shook his head and got ready to fight, shippo was hiding behind his mothers hair

Oh yeah, Shippo's here too. Sorry Shippo, hard to remember you when you get no focus at all.

"Kagome you might want to plug your ears and look away if you don't want to see this" Bankotsu told his girlfriend she nodded and walked away.

Or you could request they don't go and kill the bandits? You're not a fan of seeing humans get killed, remember?

When she was gone Bankotsu cut the rapist looking one's head off after Suikotsu shoved his claws into his body spilling his guts onto the ground, Jakotsu was playing with the other one having fun with him then with a flick of the wrist had his hole body cut to pieces "such a shame they didn't even put up a good enough fight" "I agree" Suikotsu stated.

At least your negligence of detail was a bit of a boon here. Still don't know what the point of this scene is, though.

Kagome walked out and saw the body's looked away 'don't be upset Kagome they were going to rape you' she smiled at her and Shippo's saviors.

D'aw. >.>

OVER AT INUYASHA'S LOCATION

Inuyasha was bored and lost in thought when until he ran into this girl she had white hair like him and also had white ears on the top of her head and blue eyes "oh im so sorry I didn't know where I was going are you okay?" "im fine why don't you watch where your going next time" he all but growled out

Bored, huh? Guess he's not all too concerned with Kagome these days.

"well sorry but like I said I didn't know where I was going stupid dog" "stupid flea bitten wolf" she growled at him and he growled at her then another girl appeared next to the one girl she had black hair and black ears on the top of her head, red eyes,(was thinking of BB form death note)

I think I have some idea of what red eyes look like. This may shock you, author, but not everyone will have seen Death Note. That description is completely terrible.

and she wore a white kimono while the other girl wore a black one "please excuse me sister" Inuyasha grunted "my names Akiko and this is my twin sister Kira" she said motioning towards the girl with white hair.

Also, OC's. Normally I'd not mind, but considering this story's track record... well, at least they have no prior characterisation to ruin, so I'll probably be able to completely hate them by the end of this chapter.

"its nice to meet you two im sango" "and im miroku would either of you consider baring my child?"

Okay, two things:

1 - When the hell did Sango and Miroku get there? They were not mentioned at all.
2 - How old are these girls? I can only hope they're legal.

he got hit with a boomerang "ignore him" sango said smiling. "oh and this is Inuyasha" "its nice to meet you all me and Kira have been traveling from village to village collecting these jewel shards to find and give them to the shikon miko is she here?" "no but we are going to go see her would you like to come?" "sure" "so how many shards do you have?" Inuyasha asks "we have four" "good the more we get the more we can kill Naraku"

So how do these girls know what the jewel shards are, who they 'belong' too, and what does that last statement even mean?

"oh you know of Naraku we hate him he killed our tribe" they then told their story's Kira kept stealing glances at Inuyasha and blushed when he caught her

So, a nonchalant statement about a murdered tribe, unexplained history told to what should be our heroes, and now Kira is falling in love with Inuyasha. Woohoo.

'why is she looking at me?' Inuyasha thought to himself 'sister' 'yes Akiko?' 'do you have a crush on the half dog?' 'maybe he is strange but very interesting' 'I see' the Inuyasha group didn't know they could do that so they kept it secret.

...Huh? Do what? Judging by the quotation marks used, I can only assume they're telepathic. Yet another completely unexplained detail in the story. Does the author even give half a crap?

PoisonMaster16:so what did you think oh and just so you all know Akiko in Japanese means bright and Kira in Japanese means killer

I thought it was terrible, as usual. Now, as for these names... well, Akiko is accurate, but Kira... um, no.

The author seems to think Death Note is a reliable sourcve for the name's meaning, despite Light clearly stating 'Kira' was just an Engrish way to say 'Killer'. In actuality, 'Kira' in Japanese would mean something like 'glitter' or 'gleam'. Even 'twinkle'! For females, it's essentially the Japanese 'Ciara'.

Hell, the closest you get to 'killer' is the Gaelic meaning, 'dark'. For once, I'll be fair and give the author points for (inadvertently, mind you) giving this person a name that could coincide with her clothing, or act as irony for her hair colour or whatever.

But, I have one thing to ask... why is this relevant in any way? Will their names reveal some deep secret later on in the story? Brightness and darkness killerness?

Bankotsu: good story so far

Talk about self-indulgence.

Naraku: yes but since when do I like miko's

PoisonMaster16: you like that bitch kiky-ho and she's a miko *gags* you and Inuyasha need to get a good girl to straiten you both out because that bitch is bad news

You are sixteen. Stop acting like a petty child. Naraku once loved Kikyo, Inuyasha probably still does, get the fuck over it. She was perfectly nice before death, and had plenty reason to distrust Inuyasha afterward. Or did you skip over the parts where she forgave and aided him?

Naraku: it was onigumo who desired that miko not me

PoisonMaster16: you're the same person I am not having this argument right now.

then don't bring it up! God!

Kagome: please review and she will write the next chapter

Bankotsu: yes I am wondering what will happen next

PoisonMaster16: I will write the next chapters now if I get a kiss from naraku and Sesshomaru those two are obber sexy

I'm sorry, what?

Naraku: okay im sexy and I know it

Yes, he so sexy.

PoisonMaster16: oh god now that song is stuck in my head please review again now im going to beat up naraku for getting that song stuck in my head later J

Yeah, go beat up a fictional character for what you wrote.

Do I really need to go into why this chapter was horrible? I mean... look at it! I'm over halfway done, at least, but I might not survive this...